Rhetorical Analysis
Back when I first went to college in 2011 I had no idea what I actually wanted to do, and just felt obligated to go to college. I was originally in the Laser program at Indian Hills Community College, but soon found out that I had no interest in a subject I couldn’t wrap my head around, so I switched to Robotics. I instantly loved robotics, it all just clicked with me, and seemed almost simple to understand. I graduated from IHCC with an A.A.S in Robotics and Automation Technology. Now here I am two years later hoping to get into the Mechanical Engineering major starting in the fall.
I want to expand my knowledge of all things mechanical and, hopefully someday, create some cool new inventions for the world, or even just myself, to enjoy! I would love to learn as much as I can about mechanical engineering and maybe sprinkle in a bit of electrical engineering in there to help me along with my crazy ideas. During my time in IHCC I was exposed to different kinds of engineering through the robotics program there. Most of it was probably industrial, but it dad have a nice mix of electrical, and I would like to expand upon that knowledge. I would like to use the knowledge I already have on the subjects at hand to help along other students that may have use of it, I didn’t spend those two years at community college for nothing! I’m not exactly sure how I can personally help the University or the community around it.
Maybe I can represent the school in some kind of robotics competition, or just by making something noteworthy and getting more attention to the schools’ engineering programs. I would like to be remembered as the helpful guy that was a bit of a mad scientist when it came to making things in lab, if I can be remembered that way by anyone during my time at school I think I could be happy.
http://uiowa.orgsync.com/org/uirobotics/home
Thesis: They seem to present a fun community with a focus on mechanical projects and robotics!
Topic Sentence 1: They have a lot of videos and pictures of various events they have gone to as the club.
Topic Sentence 2: They have very professional looking posts that are all about what the club is all about.
Topic Sentence 3: They have many pictures of projects that they have made, both the finished product and them in the process of making the robot.
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Nickolas — I love your passion for robotics and mechanical invention. My husband is a mechanical engineer!
I think this is a fantastic choice of group to work with in this essay. Perhaps you might find it more interesting and fun to analyze their Facebook page? Here they may have a more personal-feeling public image.
https://www.facebook.com/robotics.uiowa/
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Hi Nickolas — a couple of notes about your outline.
1) The thesis doesn’t currently name the group or the text that you’ll be analyzing. Think of the template we used for the pop star activity: “On their website, UI Robotics presents itself as a ____, ___, and ___ organization.” Maybe one of those adjectives will be “fun.” How else would you describe their public image?
2) Make sure you’re being argumentative. To say that they “focus on mechanical projects and robotics” is a statement of fact. Could anyone disagree with it?
3) Your topic sentences should name a specific component of their website (images, text, layout/design, schedule of events? etc) that contributes to the public image you named in your revised thesis.
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